In this temple of old bones and white whiskers,
I water the plants and feed the cats.
The work of a prophetess is never done.
I decided I wanted to create a sketch, so I started with part of the first line:
In this temple of old bones
I knew I would also add the last line, so the first thing I sketched was an owl, which was going to be a cat, but when the owl shape came, I went with it. I drew a tree around it.
The image of the Morikami Museum came into my mind, so I tried to sketch it. I also did a search for images, and came up with some of the statues from the garden. I included it too.
I did the initial sketching with a black pen that has a very fine tip. Then I began to add color, first with the owl, then with the temple windows. Here's the finished sketch:
I liked the austerity of the sketch without the color, but I didn't realize that I did before I added the color. In the future, I'll try to remember to take a picture of the pre-color sketch too.
I then returned to the villanelle (more on that form here) and realized I had gotten the rhyme scheme wrong.
I water the plants and feed the cats.
The work of a prophetess is never done.
I saw an easy fix, but I'm not as crazy about it:
In this temple of white whiskers, old bones, and setting sun
I water the plants and feed the cats.The work of a prophetess is never done.
Is the rhythm of the second line off? Let me try this:
In this temple of white whiskers, old bones, and setting sun,
I water the plants, sweep the stone floor, and feed the cats.The work of a prophetess is never done.
This rhythm might be better:
In this temple of white whiskers, old bones, and setting sun,
I water the plants, feed the cats, and sweep the stone floor.The work of a prophetess is never done.
Let me return to this idea later today. Now it's time to head to spin class and the other tasks of the day.
1 comment:
Hooray for you for making this sketch and poem! Im musing about the rhythms. How about #3, but "water the plants, feed the cats, and sweep the stones." Then you'd have "bones," "stones," and "done"...just an idea. More please!
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